The leaders of most organizations tend to be older people. However, some argue that younger people make better bosses. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Write at least 250 words
Leaders of most organizations tend to be older
people
. However
, some argue that younger people
are better bosses
. I totally support second
point of view, that leaders should be younger in age.
In the Change the article
the second
Correct your spelling
beginning
begining
, being young has nothing to do Correct your spelling
beginning
in
attributing leadership skills, Change preposition
with
its
more about Correct your spelling
it's
genetic
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the genetic
inherentence
a leader is born with. After that, like any other Correct your spelling
inheritance
talent
it can be Add a comma
,talent
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taught
tough
taugh
through Correct your spelling
taught
education
process. Add an article
the education
Moreover
, younger leaders have more tolerance and resilience towards their coworkers and even the higher management. Plus, they accept the
Correct article usage
apply
organizations
change along with the Replace the word
organisational
market
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market's
constant
changes. Replace the word
constantly
In addition
, young bosses
are aware of the modern requirements,
and are able to acquire soft and hard skills , due to their young age they still have the capability to gain any skill that will help the organization to move forward. Remove the comma
apply
Furthermore
, they are not old pattern people
, they always find creative
and innovative Add an article
a creative
way
to solve problems, and Fix the agreement mistake
ways
open
to new ideas , unlike old Add a missing verb
are open
people
tend
to the classic ways to solve these problems ,because it Correct pronoun usage
who tend
work
before and for sure it will work again. Change the verb form
works
Finally
, they can go easily through Add an article
the day
day to day
challenges and can compete Add a hyphen
day-to-day
into
the market, Change preposition
in
this
because
when you are younger you take bold decisions with less fear.
To sum up, younger Add a missing verb
is because
bosses
has
nothing to do with skills, they are more Change the verb form
have
tolerate
Replace the word
tolerant
with
surroundings, and are aware of modern market requirements, which make them way better thee older Change preposition
of
bosses
with static
mindset.Correct article usage
a static
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.
A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).
Stick to this essay structure:
- Paragraph 1 - Introduction
- Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 4 - Conclusion