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The leaders of most organizations tend to be older people. However, some argue that younger people make better bosses. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Leaders of most organizations tend to be older
people
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.
However
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, some argue that younger
people
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 are better
bosses
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. I totally support
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second
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the second
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 point of view, that leaders should be younger in age. In the
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beginning
begining
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beginning
, being young has nothing to do
in
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 attributing leadership skills,
its
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 more about
genetic
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the genetic
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inherentence
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inheritance
 a leader is born with. After that, like any other
talent
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 it can be
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taught
tough
taugh
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taught
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education
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 process.
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, younger leaders have more tolerance and resilience towards their coworkers and even the higher management. Plus, they accept
the
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organizations
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 change along with the
market
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constant
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 changes.
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, young
bosses
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 are aware of the modern requirements
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 and are able to acquire soft and hard skills , due to their young age they still have the capability to gain any skill that will help the organization to move forward.
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, they are not old pattern
people
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, they always find
creative
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 and innovative
way
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 to solve problems, and
open
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 to new ideas , unlike old
people
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tend
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 to the classic ways to solve these problems ,because it
work
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 before and for sure it will work again.
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, they can go easily through
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the day
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day to day
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 challenges and can compete
into
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 the market,
this
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because
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 when you are younger you take bold decisions with less fear. To sum up, younger
bosses
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has
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 nothing to do with skills, they are more
tolerate
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with
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of
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 surroundings, and are aware of modern market requirements, which make them way better thee older
bosses
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static
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a static
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 mindset.

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • strategic decision-making
  • crisis management
  • innovative ideas
  • adaptable
  • tech-savvy
  • digital transformation
  • complex situations
  • high-pressure decisions
  • empathy
  • patience
  • strategic foresight
  • authoritative
  • collaborative work culture
  • dynamic
  • inclusive organizational culture
  • ageism
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