Many countries use fossil fuels (coal, oil, natural gas) as the main source of energy. However, in some countries the use of the alternative sources of energy (wind energy and solar energy) is encouraged. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this development?

The starting point of my desire of studying abroad
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when I was in the 11th grade, my parents arrange
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to California so as to better educate me about the world.
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it sounds cliché, I still remember the
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the headquarter of Google and the walk of
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fame in Hollywood. It amused me and made me constantly
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about
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abroad. Since
then
, I strive so hard to improve my
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,
also
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exchange program
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Zionsvillie
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high school in Indiana (U.S.A). During
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period in Indiana, I experienced an absolutely different teaching method and
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background in more liberty way which
also
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country.
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receiving and visiting the sister school in Singapore. Different from the exchange program,
firstly
, I need to arrange the whole welcoming tour and activities, which cultivate my ability to organize
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communicate with people from
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, we went to Singapore
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them.
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they are in Asia too, they are not trained to be
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or extra-curriculum activities in high school.
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the
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developed my outlook more mature on the world and trigger my curiosity to gain a better understanding of the world;
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my goal to step out of my comfort zone to study abroad
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

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  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainable
  • renewable energy
  • non-renewable resources
  • carbon footprint
  • greenhouse gases
  • energy independence
  • climate change
  • environmental impact
  • infrastructural development
  • technological innovation
  • economic disruption
  • fossil fuel depletion
  • energy transition
  • consistency and reliability
  • wildlife habitat
  • natural landscapes
  • solar panels
  • wind turbines
  • energy consumption
  • ecological balance
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