Big salary is much more important than job satisfaction. Do you agree or disagree

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A growing concern in today's society is globalization. To my certain knowledge, a number of
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hold a view that having high wages
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is more noticeable than how much
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satisfy
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with their careers.
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, I completely disagree with
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opinion and have the opposite idea which is passionate in
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should be
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us an important factor while working. Looking at the argument for the view that
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satisfaction
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is much more remarkable than
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salary
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, it is admitted that some of them prove to be quite strong. In
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, the most significant reason is that when
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work
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with their passion, their
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can be completed more perfectly. One strong argument
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case is that some
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require the workers to
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under
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: to finish it successfully.
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,
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who have
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in what they are doing can deal with it easily and completely. A
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. good point worth mentioning here is that the workers can motivate themselves to be better
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.
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derives from the
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that
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who love what they do,
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can earn more for themselves experience and knowledge to improve their skills in their careers.
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of interest,
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always need to have new ideas and use their
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for their
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,
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, they would read more or leam more from other sources to gain as much as they can. Indeed
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supporters of the idea that
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satisfaction
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should be a remarkable reason when choosing where to
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. They certainly have solid reasons for their own point of view. And obviously, their justifications seem convincing as well. It could be argued that
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with high
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as their
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priority can feel less
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while having
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time in their
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is because
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would feel that the
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is the challenge in their project and it is
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an opportunity to show out their skills and talents.
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that,
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opinion may appear reasonable somehow due to the
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that when the workers feel less
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in their
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, they might want to continue their career for a long period. To be specific, if
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have high wages
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, it means they have to exchange their energy and
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with lots of
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,
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boring
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, lose their motivation, and
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quit their careers.
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, teachers have to
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with students
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, but not all
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of them are good and if teachers don't love their
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or
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it, they might get bored or lose their
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for it and quit eventually. From what has been discussed, I completely agree.
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The opinion claiming that jo how
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get
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, from their
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is much more noticeable than
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with high
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.
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stems from the
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that
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with interest and passion, employees can complete their
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,
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motivate themselves to be a better version
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,
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feel less
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with their
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and can
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a long-term period
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • remuneration
  • financial security
  • motivation
  • luxuries
  • material possessions
  • fulfillment
  • work-life balance
  • stress levels
  • mental well-being
  • job security
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