Big salary is much more important than job satisfaction. Do you agree or disagree

A growing concern in today's society is globalization. To my certain knowledge, a number of
people
hold a view that having high wages
jobs
is more noticeable than how much
people
satisfy
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with their careers.
However
, I completely disagree with
this
opinion and have the opposite idea which is passionate in
workplace
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should be
perspected
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persecuted
us an important factor while working. Looking at the argument for the view that
job
satisfaction
is much more remarkable than
high
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salary
in
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job
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, it is admitted that some of them prove to be quite strong. In
fact
, the most significant reason is that when
people
work
with their passion, their
work
can be completed more perfectly. One strong argument
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this
case is that some
jobs
require the workers to
work
under
pressure
: to finish it successfully.
therefore
,
people
who have
interest
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in what they are doing can deal with it easily and completely. A
further
. good point worth mentioning here is that the workers can motivate themselves to be better
everyday
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.
This
derives from the
fact
that
people
who love what they do,
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can earn more for themselves experience and knowledge to improve their skills in their careers.
For instance
. as designers who have
such
lots
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of interest,
people
always need to have new ideas and use their
creativeness
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for their
job
,
moreover
, they would read more or leam more from other sources to gain as much as they can. Indeed
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supporters of the idea that
job
satisfaction
should be a remarkable reason when choosing where to
work
. They certainly have solid reasons for their own point of view. And obviously, their justifications seem convincing as well. It could be argued that
people
work
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with high
satisfaction
as their
first
priority can feel less
pressure
while having
hard
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time in their
job
.
This
is because
people
would feel that the
pressure
they have to face
with
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is the challenge in their project and it is
also
an opportunity to show out their skills and talents.
Besides
that,
this
opinion may appear reasonable somehow due to the
fact
that when the workers feel less
pressure
in their
job
, they might want to continue their career for a long period. To be specific, if
people
have high wages
jobs
, it means they have to exchange their energy and
work
with lots of
pressure
,
this
leads
people
become
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boring
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, lose their motivation, and
then
quit their careers.
For example
, teachers have to
work
with students
everyday
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, but not all
the
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of them are good and if teachers don't love their
job
or
passionate
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with
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it, they might get bored or lose their
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for it and quit eventually. From what has been discussed, I completely agree.
with
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The opinion claiming that jo how
people
get
satisfaction
, from their
job
is much more noticeable than
jobs
with high
salary
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.
This
stems from the
fact
that
work
with interest and passion, employees can complete their
job
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jobs
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more
mord
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more
high]
effective
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,
they
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motivate themselves to be a better version
everyday
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,
work
feel less
pressure
with their
job
and can
work
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a long-term period
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

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  • Finally
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • remuneration
  • financial security
  • motivation
  • luxuries
  • material possessions
  • fulfillment
  • work-life balance
  • stress levels
  • mental well-being
  • job security
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