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Some people think that school and government should take responsibility to transport children to school. While some people think that parents should get children to school. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #school #government #responsibility #transport #children #parents
What is the price to be paid for freedom and what if each and every sacrifice made and reason to live turns into dust all in a moment – tragic reality for characters of Victor Hugo’s most renowned masterpieces
as well as
 film of 2012 and Broadway musical. Being the biggest fan of both movie and book it’s hard to make up my own mind and to choose the perfect depiction of what was happening in France of the 19th century.
For
this
 reason, I come up with proposal – we will discuss the main features of each
way
 of
story
 interpretation and by the end of current review you will possess information needed to make THE decision: to spend around 60 hours reading two folios, crying each couple of hours, or to invest your spare 2.5 hours in watching the film dropping tears once in 20 minutes. The initial text provides us with thorough description and meticulously depicts circumstances of each deed and each happening. From
time
 to
time
 it may seem a bit dull but later the understanding that all of it has the goal coordinating your feelings and gently pushing towards inevitability of final.
On the other hand
, film can’t afford itself to waste
time
 and eager to concentrate information in the most “digestible” manner. And I must admit, that
this
 achievement was accomplished. The removal of secondary
story
 lines, concentration of action and getting rid of unnecessary descriptions inevitably led to loss of depth and atmosphere but at the same
time
 provided the immense rhythm and shrank the magnum opus to an appropriate format. All in all, it is only up to you to decide what is your
way
 to get acquainted with
this
story
: action side or romantic one. For me it is still in the same
way
 as it was decade ago – I am fond of
story
 itself without looking back on
way
 it was interpreted.
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Task Response
Ensure that the response directly addresses the task question, weighing the two different perspectives without bias. Provide a balanced and nuanced discussion of both viewpoints.
Coherence and Cohesion
Maintain a clear and logical structure throughout the essay. Use appropriate linking words and cohesive devices to connect ideas. Ensure that the introduction introduces the topic and purpose, while the conclusion summarises the key points and restates the opinion.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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