IN SOME PLACES, WORKERS ARE REQUIRED TO RETIRE AT A SPECIFIC AGE. IN OTHER PLACES, WORKERS CAN RETIRE WHEN THEY CHOOSE. IN YOUR OPINION, SHOULD THERE BE A MANDATORY RETIREMENT AGE FOR ALL WORKERS?

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Topic: The increase in the production of consumer goods results in damage to the natural environment. What are the causes of this? What can be done to solve this problem?

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