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The government should provide free public transport facilities 24/7 to reduce traffic congestion. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Parents
 have some dilemmas about the
childcare
 process. Some
parents
 prefer
childcare
centres
 to
grandparents
.Other
parents
 think that
grandparents
 are the best option for caring for kids.Both sides have advantages and disadvantages.
Childcare
centres
such
 as kindergartens offer
children
 systematic training and psychological
support
 and which may turn back their academic success in future.
Grandparents
 can not give systematic education like kindergarten but they give kids a lovely atmosphere and curiously enough
children
 take role model
grandparents
 manner easily by household. In my opinion,
childcare
centres
 are the best selection for
children
.
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Day care
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centres
such
 as kindergartens are designed for
children
's and
parent's
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 needs. At that place, people who understand
children
's psychology work here. So, those working here are aware of how they should behave with
children
. Especially,
children
 suffer difficulty when they give up their
parents
. It is big trouble for them in terms of their feelings. At that moment
children
 do not know how they should feel and how they should behave.Some of the
children
 try to isolate themselves from others ones. In a contrast, some of the
children
 give extreme reactions to find the attention they want. Professional
support
 is a key element to regulate
children
's feelings. Each child has different characteristics and styles of expression they change from one to another. Without professional
support
 like kindergarten teachers,
children
 who give up their
parents
 do not get over
this
 problem over the course of long years. With systematic schooling and activities
such
 as Montessori or sports ,activities
children
 are able to develop specific ways to reduce their sadness and pain coming from being alone. The majority of working
parents
 think that grandmothers and grandfathers are the best way to caring kids. In the old time, about 50 years before, only a limited number of women used to work outside.
Instead
 of working outside, they used to care for
children
 at home. It is the reality of the baby boomer generation.
This
 is, the reason the baby boomer generation has experience when it comes to caring for
children
.
That is
 the reason why the baby boomer generation is chosen by
parents
 to growing up
children
.
Grandparents
' houses are comfortable places compared to
childcare
centres
. Within the grandparent's home,
children
 acquire knowledge and experience naturally and randomly. The educational atmosphere appears within life itself without spending any effort. To exemplify
this
 condition,
children
 have opportunities to observe their
grandparents
 when they manage domestic work
such
 as cleaning or cooking... As time rolls on,
children
 take them as role models to their
grandparents
 and simulate their manner when they play games.
Consequently
,
childcare
centres
 and
grandparents
' houses have different types of advantages.
Grandparents
 are able to ensure
children
's safety and a peaceful house atmosphere.babysitting
centres
 give
children
 emotional backing and systematic education.According to me, systematic education and professional emotional
support
 play
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a
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critical
role
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roles
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 in
children
's life.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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