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You work at home and have a problem with a piece of equipment that you use for your job. Write a letter to the shop or company which supplied the equipment. In your letter, . describe the problem with the equipment . explain how this problem is affecting your work . say what you want the shop or company to do

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Dear Sir/Madam My name is Niranjan. I have Employee ID
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: 12345, and
working
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I work
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 as an Azure Administrator in our organization. I received a new laptop from the IT team
last
 month. It was working well for me until yesterday. When I tried to log in today, I was not able to do
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 I have tried multiple times in different ways.
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, I will have a lot of meetings with our clients daily and deploy multiple updated applications into the production environment using Azure DevOps as
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a CI
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/CD pipeline tool.
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, because of the issue, I cannot perform any of my daily activities. I will send my laptop to the company's address today. So, please resolve the issue as soon as possible as it is hampering my daily routines. I request you to send a temporary laptop for
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 being until it gets repaired. I will be waiting for you to reply. Yours Sincerely, Niranjan Reddy K
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