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Employers sometimes ask people applying for jobs for personal information, such as their hobbies and interests, and whether they are married or single. Some people say that this information may be relevant and useful. Others, however, disagree. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#employers #people #jobs #information #hobbies #interests
Dear Sir/Madam, I received an Email a few days back from our Human Resource
Team
 related to
sharing
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the sharing
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 of personal
information
 of all
employees
. I want to share my views about the Pros and Cons of it.
Firstly
, Following factors
such
 as Hobbies, Food Interests, Preferred locations, Single or married, Salary details etc.
Secondly
, having personal
information
such
 as hobbies, preferred destinations to visit, food interests etc of
employees
, facilitates the Management to organize an event either in the office premises or in any resorts for refreshments and to conduct any Sports events or open-air concerts with all
employees
. Having
information
 about Blood Group will be helpful in any emergency condition to react and get it done as fast as possible. When it comes to disadvantages, the Personal
Information
 of an individual is not required to
know
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 to everyone as some may misuse it in
otherways
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other ways
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. Having
those kind
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that kind
those kinds
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 of
information
 among the
team
 is enough. Related to
Salary
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the Salary
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 of an employee, it is better not to disclose even with your
collegue
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colleague
colleagues
also
 as it is indirectly responsible for
team
co-ordination
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coordination
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while
 performing daily activities. It impacts the
team
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team's
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 performance in the long run as well and allows us to create a kind of grudge among
employees
. I want
to conclude
 that, having
information
 about an individual
upto
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up to
certain
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a certain
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 extent is enough, sometimes knowing more
also
 causes many problems and indirectly it affects our individual performance as well. So, my request to every employee is, Please do your work on
daily
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 basis and don't think about your
collegues
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colleagues
. Yours Sincerely, Niranjan Reddy K.
Submitted by niranjanreddy791 on

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • job application
  • personal information
  • hobbies and interests
  • marital status
  • relevant
  • useful
  • privacy
  • assessing candidates
  • qualifications
  • experience
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