Employers sometimes ask people applying for jobs for personal information, such as their hobbies and interests, and whether they are married or single. Some people say that this information may be relevant and useful. Others, however, disagree. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Dear Sir/Madam, I received an Email a few days back from our Human Resource
Team
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the sharing
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of personal
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of all
employees
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. I want to share my views about the Pros and Cons of it.
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, Following factors
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as Hobbies, Food Interests, Preferred locations, Single or married, Salary details etc.
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, having personal
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such
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as hobbies, preferred destinations to visit, food interests etc of
employees
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, facilitates the Management to organize an event either in the office premises or in any resorts for refreshments and to conduct any Sports events or open-air concerts with all
employees
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. Having
information
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about Blood Group will be helpful in any emergency condition to react and get it done as fast as possible. When it comes to disadvantages, the Personal
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of an individual is not required to
know
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to everyone as some may misuse it in
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other ways
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. Having
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of
information
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among the
team
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is enough. Related to
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the Salary
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of an employee, it is better not to disclose even with your
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colleague
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as it is indirectly responsible for
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co-ordination
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while
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performing daily activities. It impacts the
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team
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performance in the long run as well and allows us to create a kind of grudge among
employees
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. I want
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that, having
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about an individual
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up to
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extent is enough, sometimes knowing more
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causes many problems and indirectly it affects our individual performance as well. So, my request to every employee is, Please do your work on
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basis and don't think about your
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colleagues
. Yours Sincerely, Niranjan Reddy K.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • job application
  • personal information
  • hobbies and interests
  • marital status
  • relevant
  • useful
  • privacy
  • assessing candidates
  • qualifications
  • experience
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