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Write about the following topic: Should education and healthcare be free of charge and funded by the government, or should it be the responsibility of the people to pay for these services? To what extent you agree or disagree?

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In today's world, many countries provide their citizens with
education
 and
healthcare
 free of cost, while in other countries, parents need to bear the expenses of children's
education
 and
family's
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 medicine and other health issues. In my opinion,
government
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the government
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 of
country
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a country
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 should bear either a full or partial portion of the costs incurred for the
education
 and
healthcare
 of its citizen.
This
 essay will explain the reasons behind my thoughts and justify my opinion.
Education
 and
healthcare
 are two major basic needs of the population of every
country
 in
this
 world.
Therefore
, it is the responsibility of
government
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 of the
country
 to meet these requirements of its citizen.
In addition
,
people
 nowadays pay a hefty amount of taxes and VATs to the
government
, which are deposited in the fund to be spent on the welfare of
country
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the country
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 as well as its citizen.
For example
, in Bangladesh, working
people
 pay at least 10% of their income as taxes every year.
Moreover
, they
also
 pay Value Added Tax (VAT) for
variety
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services and products used in day-to-day life.
This
 money goes directly to
government
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the government
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 and it is the right of
people
 to demand
the
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 free or subsidised
education
 system and
healthcare
 in return for the payment made by them to the
government
. Getting
education
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an education
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 and health treatment free of cost
bring
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brings
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 a prosperous society since a major portion of a family's income is spent in these two sectors. If a family does not need to think about these costs, there will be more surplus income which eventually can be invested in stocks, bonds, and other possible industries, resulting in
a
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booming economic conditions.
Moreover
, if
government
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the government
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 takes the responsibility
of
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for
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 payment for
education
 and medication, it can ensure that all the
people
 of
country
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the country
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 are getting proper schooling and treatment. To conclude, in the present time,
government
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the government
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 can play a major role in making peoples' life more secure by providing quality
education
 and
healthcare
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a healthcare
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 system free of expense. In
this
 way, the
country
 can have happy
people
 with economic growth and the entire prosperity of
the
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society.
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