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Employers sometimes ask people applying for jobs for personal information, such as their hobbies and interests, and whether they are married or single. Some people say that this information may be relevant and useful. Others, however, disagree. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, Recruiting Companies ask for personal
information
 at the time of the Interview. Some people generally disagree with that one. I prefer to share personal
information
 with the employer as it facilitates them to allocate a suitable position to us based on our
profile
. Generally, All the people were not suited for managerial positions, as only a few could manage people, and at the same time, all were not fit for marketing jobs. Based on the employee's
profile
, the recruiters can decide which position suits them. A few may get an opportunity to work abroad based on their resume. I want to tag a personal experience that happened to my cousin recently as he got a chance to work in a Clients location over his competitors because of his previous experience dealing with clients.
Firstly
, If management has personal
information
 about their employees,
such
 as hobbies, interests, preferred destination, etc. It would be easy for them to organise any events in the office premises or nearby resorts for refreshments.
Secondly
, having blood group
information
 of employees would be helpful in any emergency. Recently, I observed in my company that a colleague's relative was saved because of the data.
On the other hand
, nowadays, most mention a few additional attributes in their
profile
 to get picked by the company. Sometimes, sharing personal
information
 could lead to discrimination in some companies, depending entirely on higher management. In one of my friend's companies, the manager targeted an employee in his team based on Caste and Religion. A few times, an individual's working capability will differ from the
profile
. My conclusion is, Sharing
information
 with recruiters sometimes leads us to a problem. Primarily, it allows employees to get a suitable position based on their
profile
 to show their capability in the office and improve aspects
such
 as technical and Softskills.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • job application
  • personal information
  • hobbies and interests
  • marital status
  • relevant
  • useful
  • privacy
  • assessing candidates
  • qualifications
  • experience
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