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To achieve personal happiness, the relationships we have with other people (friends, colleagues, family) are more essential than every other thing. Issues like wealth and occupations take the second place. Write to support this claim.

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The growing pressures of the money-driven world we live in widely cause the gravitation towards material items.
However
, personal happiness is not achieved through things like
work
, wealth, and success. Though these things may be attractive and coveted, it does not refute the fact that relationships with friends, colleagues, and family members are genuine secrets to living happily.
This
 will be proven by bringing up the topic of wealthy superstars who steadily live lonely lives and advice from elderly people based on experience. The
first
 thing that comes to mind when we correlate money and happiness is famous film stars, who performed in many famous movies and they spend all their lives at
work
. Due to their,
work
, they travelled all the
time
, and due to
this
 those people were unable to spend
time
 with their families and friends. With each passing, year their bond with their loved ones becomes weaker and weaker. In the end, their families no more feel their absence and start to live without them. When those superstars retired from their
work
; they live lonely in their gigantic houses. As mentioned above, elderly peoples
also
 advise to give proper
time
 to their families and live like a human, not a bot who just did one job and do not feel any emotions and consider that with money he can buy everything in his life;
that is
 not true at all.
Furthermore
, our elders lived in a
time
 when people's lives are not money-oriented but relationships are driven
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