Some
people
should not retire from their
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at a stipulated age. I believe
this
could be uncomfortable and (can) cause (very)many problems. The act of working is beneficial for humans. Others need to earn money for their expenses,
such
as travelling and eating,
as well as
they need to have more quality of life , and challenges and keep their routines every day.
Firstly
, working is important for
people
’s health, psychological and physical,
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well-being and (realization personals)personal realizations. They need to interact with other colleagues(,
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)in many environments and (solutions to)solve their problems each day, show their experience and (
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)teach the young employees about things with their experience.
Secondly
, retired
people
need money because they have to buy more medicines and have (the)a bigger expenditure (biggest) in their routine (and), so it is important to travel and know different
people
and
this
is relatively expensive (your retiree's stay isn’t sufficient for all expenses)to pay when retired.
Thirdly
,
on the other hand
, (labourers)workers (in their get)can get stressed without routines and they could feel useless causing psychological problems among others. Just
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it was already said,”
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work makes a man worthy”. So, the job makes the men feel useful in their
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and always have (always) a purpose. In conclusion, so, every work is unique and has many situations in each. The Conditions differ, at various places, working with risks,
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situations (insalubrious) and that leave the workers thinking or have (necessary for retirement)a
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to retire ,
for example
,
people
who work in the sea,
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farms or in contact with chemical products,
then
, I believe that
people
should choose when is the best moment to retire from their activities and time for rest.
Therefore
, I believe that there shouldn't be an age to retire.