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Traffic jam is one problem faced by almost every large city

#traffic #jam #city
Almost every city around the world somehow
face
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 a problem which is
traffic
 congestion.
In other words
 , there are too many cars passing at the same time, or
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all over
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allover
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all over
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 the city in a specific
past
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part
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 of the day.
Therefore
 in
this
 essay
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I will outline my opinion about
this
 topic detailing what would be the best solutions for
this
 problem.
Firstly
 due to economical growth globally more and more
people
 effort cars to improve. There are possibility
employees
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for employees
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 opportunities.
However
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this
cause
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 long
traffic
 jams in big cities which creates a lot of stress and
roadrage
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road rage
road-rage
 among drivers and passengers.
For example
, yesterday I was late for the meeting ,
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because
beacuse
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because
 of
traffic
 congestion.
This
 condition made me very nervous. Another reason for the
traffic
 intensity is that public transportation
is
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in
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this cities
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this city
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 are not properly
arrenged
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arranged
 and of a low quality.
Therefore
 many
people
 find personal care more attractive and comfortable opting for purchasing automobiles. One of the
solution
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 to the matter is to invest in public transport infrastructure in order to prioritize
this
 means of transportation over
other
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others
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. Another way to tackle the issue might be strong
propogand
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propaganda
 and publicity of car sharing, bike riding and online working and as well as shopping which
aim
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 at encouraging
people
 to use cars less.
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, during covid 19 outdoor activities had to be done
to
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the
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home.
Hence
 many
people
 have transformed
to
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apply
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online from offline. And they did 99
percent
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per cent
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of the shopping without leaving home. To conclude, when there were problems with
trafficcongestion
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traffic congestion
 I
also
 highlighted
it's
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its
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 solution above through examples.
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