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In many countries, plastic containers have become more common than ever and are used by many food and drink companies. Do you think the advantages outweighs the disadvantages.

Nowadays, due to its
comforts
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, many countries prefer
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products
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instead
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 of other options. Even
food
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 and drink companies like to pack their
products
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 in
plastic
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. I believe that the advantages
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 as
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 easy transportation and economic benefits, will not outweigh the disadvantages.
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 with,
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 containers are very common in the
food
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 and beverages industries as it is very suitable for packing, storage and transportation.
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, most of the companies are located outside the city to get enough space for
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 processing and parking facilities.
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, they have to bring the finished goods from the company for distribution. If the companies go for eco-friendly
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 like paper
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 or banana
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, there are chances to spill the liquid, especially oil, from the packages.
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, they have to be extra careful about the temperature settings inside the container of the vehicle to avoid moisture. Paper bags may get wet
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 if the moisture level increases.
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,
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items
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 are less expensive than eco-friendly
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 and easily available in the market. Even though
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items
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 have many advantages as mentioned above, they are very dangerous for both humans and nature. When the heat comes in contact with
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, toxic chemicals will be released. These chemicals are extremely dangerous for our health. During the packing process, a high temperature is used to seal the package.
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, most of the
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items
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 are moved to containers when it is very hot. S, by having
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 from these packages, toxic chemicals will reach our bodies and we will become sick. Another reason to avoid the usage of
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 is to protect mother earth. After usage, the majority of the
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 waste goes to land. Even after hundred years,
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 will remain in the soil without degradation.
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 will prevent water from reaching the soil and negatively affect the growth of plants, trees and earthworms.
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,
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 is dangerous for aquatic life.
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, via rivers,
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 carry bags and containers reach the sea which
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 to the outer sea. Turtles and fish will get stuck in these bags and their movement will be restricted. In extreme cases, they may not be able to have
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 and will die
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. To conclude,
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 is injurious to humans as well as to nature. It will cause serious health issues and destroy marine life as well as disturb the growth of plants and trees.
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, I strongly believe that the positive outcomes of
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 usage will not outweigh the negative aspects.

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