Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Health
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services are a prominent part of every country as provide people with a number of opportunities to have discounts and even free checkups. According to me, every country should provide basic checkups for
health
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free of cost
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of expensive medical treatments which are unaffordable to provide for the government. There are numerous points to explain my viewpoint.
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of all, in
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developing nations, there
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number
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of poor people who are unable to pay for even the basic
health
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care facilities. In
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case, authorities must provide them opportunities to get
health
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care free of cost.
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, it
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folks to maintain their financial balance. People can use these funds to do charities as
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of individuals
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not
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access to food, clothes and other living basic resources.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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