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Recent surveys show increased interest in relocation and travel to other countries. What may be the reasons for this trend, and what will be the possible outcome from this behavior? Provide examples for your opinion.

#surveys #show #interest #relocation #travel #countries #trend #outcome #behavior
You may say
it’s
 showing off to say that you are lucky if you live in
Saint-Petersburg
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 but I don’t agree. If you are coming here even for a short time, you’re condemned to fall in love with
this
city
. The special atmosphere
is
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sprawling
through
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 whole the
city
. You can find a lot of advantages in living here even at
first
 glance you may think that
it’s
spotless
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the spotless
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city
 but for sure as
every where
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 you can find some drawbacks. It feels like
the
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life here goes smoothly and vibrant
it
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at
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 the same time. I can’t say that
it’s
compact
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city
 but you can find all
what
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 you need in a hand. In
general
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 Saint-Petersburg is well-run. Streets are clean and tidy but you still can meet someone dropping
the
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litter,
talking
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 about buildings, some of them should be condemned to be renovated.
In
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 the same
time
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 some
neighborhoods
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neighbourhoods
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 are really affluent, you can crawl there to take a look at reach life. I think that the rate of crime is quite low here, so you can not
to
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warry
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worry
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 about
to be
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 choked or mugged.
Generally
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 you feel safe and secure here, but
it’s
 possible to find chaotic places where you can find yourself in
danger
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situation
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. The weather is quite changeable. Sometimes
it’s
 hot and humid, sometimes
it’s
 cold and rainy. Just come and check if you like
Saint-Petersburg
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Saint Petersburg
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