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it is the responsibility of the governemant to take care of health of citizens or citizens should take care of their own health. Give your own opinion?

#responsibility #governemant #care #health #citizens
Mikhail Ustekhin
Quality
 Assurance Director St Petersburg, St Petersburg City, Russia Experience Sitronics KT
Quality
 Director February 2020 - Present (2
years
 10
months
) Санкт-Петербург, Россия -Creation of testing department in the
company
 from scratch; -Project management outsourcing mobile development
team
; -Hiring and onboarding new employees; -1:1 meetings, motivation and development of staff; -Resource planning and task allocation; -Creation and controling mobile applications testing process; -Taking part in formation of common processes in development; -Organization of test environment and selection of
tools
; -Preparation of technical and project documentation; -Implementation of automation testing; -Collection of performance metrics, process optimization; -App release management; -Business trips to customers -Preparing test
activities
 based on analytics from production field MightyCall
Quality
 Assurance Tester February 2019 - December 2019 (11
months
) Санкт-Петербург, Россия Automation Load Testing VoIP based on python scripting and SIPp. FlightPath3D Lead
QA
 September 2018 - February 2019 (6
months
) Санкт-Петербург, Россия -
create
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QA
team
 from scratch -managed and solved problems with
environment
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the environment
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 for testing purposes -prepared plans, deadlines, milestones -created scope of
activities
 for
QA’s
 -performed daily meetings with the
team
 -controlled execution of
QA’s
activities
 -interviewed candidates to
QA
 department -trained new employees for all technologies and software developed in
company
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,
as well as
 working with
tools
 used in testing -coordinate teamwork Zodiac Interactive Lead
QA
Engineer
 September 2013 - August 2018 (5
years
) Developing iTV solutions on managed and unmanaged devices for American cable telecommunications
company
 (Charter Communications, CVC, Rogers, ) and
european
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 market (Deutsche Telekom, Liberty Global, etc). Highlights -started as a system integrator
engineer
 on Motorola platform -developed
tools
 for
QA
team
 on C#, Python -led
team
 of 15+
QA
 engineers on Cisco, Motorola, NextGen platform -troubleshot problems with customer -supported
QA
team
 during release periods -managed test cases coverage -tested complex features on system of services and set top boxes -managed and solved problems with environment for testing purposes -prepared plans, deadlines, milestones -created scope of
activities
 for
QA’s
 -performed daily meetings with the
team
 -controlled execution of
QA’s
activities
 -interviewed candidates to
QA
 department -trained new employees for all technologies and software developed in
company
,
as well as
 working with
tools
 used in testing -have been on business trips to New York City, Saint Louis, Missouri and Denver, Colorado as a system integrator on-site for our customer Charter Communications
Last
 2
years
 worked as a
QA
 lead
engineer
 with fifteen and more
QA
 engineers in the
team
 participated in projects "Deutsche Telekom" and "Charter". Ensured
quality
 of software for
set top
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 boxes from
the
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apply
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scratch with null requirements till
successfully
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 demonstrations (QAM streams & IPTV streams) for
european
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European
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 and
usa
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USA
 companies. PROTEI
QA
 May 2011 - September 2013 (2
years
 5
months
) Cubio Rus Support
Engineer
 May 2008 - April 2010 (2
years
) Education The Bonch-Bruevich Saint-Petersburg State University of Telecommunications Specialist, Telecommunications Engineering · (2004 - 2009)
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • healthcare
  • public health
  • preventive measures
  • health education
  • funding
  • resources
  • accessibility
  • public policies
  • personal choices
  • healthcare infrastructure
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