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Many people think that women should have given the same roles to male in military and police forces. Many people think that women are not suitable for this job. Discuss both views and give opinions.

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People
 have different views about the
role
 of
women
 in
military
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the military
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 and
police
forces
. While some
people
 believe that
women
 should have the same
job
 and
responsibility
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responsibilities
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 as
men
, others argue that
women
are not qualify
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 for
this
 kind of work. My essay will analyze these camps before giving my own opinion. Some
people
 hold a firm belief that
women
 and
men
 should be treated equally when it comes to
job
 positions in
military
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the military
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 and
police
forces
.
This
 can be beneficial thanks to the fact that these
forces
 will now have a larger number of soldiers and officers since they can choose both
male
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males
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or
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and
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female
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females
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 for the
job
, helping to reduce the workload and increase
the
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work efficiency. Research conducted by the US military in 2019 has shown that by recruiting both
men
 and
women
 for the same
role
, they can solve the problem of lack of labour and increase the overall efficiency
in
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 their
forces
 by 20%. Others stand their ground that
women
 can not be equal to
men
 in the military and
police
forces
. To support
this
 argument, many
people
 stated that being a policeman or a soldier is a dangerous
job
 and requires a person with
an
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excellent physical ability. These
people
 claimed that choosing a woman for
this
role
 can lead to
the
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 escalating rate of casualties, taking a staggering toll on the security of a whole nation.
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 CONCLUSION In my own perspective, I am more convinced by the former view.
This
 is because of the disbelief about
women
's physical capability on the other side of the argument. Many recent studies show that
this
 is the same for both
men
 and
women
.
Therefore
women
 should be given the same
role
 as
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a male
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male
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males
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 in
military
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the military
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 and
police
forces
.
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