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Some people like to try new things, for example places to visit and types of food. other people prefer to keep doing things they are familier with. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, all over the world, trying new things is becoming popular. While some
people
 prefer doing new things, others think there are disadvantages to doing new stuff. I firmly believed that both perspectives play
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 role in our decisions.
Firstly
, trying new tasks will give you
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a unique
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experience
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 and good memories that you can share with close
people
.
Also
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 some
people
 easily get bored doing
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the same
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 activity. Some employers too often change their workplace.
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The new
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 experience has been a breath of fresh air
to
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 many workers.
On the other hand
, some kind of
people
enjoy
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to do
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 familiar ones, because it is easier to do and they know that expect.
For example
, if someone would live to travel
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 corner of the world,
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 can prefer
similar
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a similar
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 area.
Moreover
, they already had known about that place so they can calculate outlays.
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 they would be confident about
selected
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 location. In conclusion, as far as I see it, I would say that choosing places, food,
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colors
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 completely depends on
individual's
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 interest. But I would
choose
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 have a different experience. For
me
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 it is more
deligful
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delightful
 than being stuck in one place.
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