Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The best way to travel is in a group led by a tour guide. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Nowadays, it is common that
people
take
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a break from
busy
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a busy
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lifestyle
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and go
for
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trips, either to
different
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a different
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city
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cities
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or abroad
depends
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on the
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circumstances
circumtances
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circumstances
. Travelling is the best
way
to relax mind and body. Usually, these travels are guided by an escort and
this
assistance makes
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holidays
hoildays
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holidays
more exciting. In my point of view,
people
should travel with a guided
group
. I believe
this
way
because of certain reasons which will be defined in the following essay.
Firstly
, travelling with a
group
in the presence of a
tour
guide
makes
trip
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a trip
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safe because it is commonly seen that
people
who are travelling alone become victims of certain tragedies like
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accidents, snatching and even murder.
For example
, recently, I was watching a news broadcast that was all about a foreign couple who went to Mountain areas of Pakistan and got lost in the woods, Luckily, they were found alive after a rescue mission is done by police in that area. So to avoid these mishappenings it is preferable to have a
guide
because local guides know the place in detail and they are experienced to deal with any emergency situations.
Secondly
, travelling in a
group
make
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makes
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a
tour
memorable because
people
have a great chance to connect with other
group
members and share their experiences.
Moreover
, it creates more fun and excitement among
group
members; definitely, it is
golden
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opportunity to make new friends.
For instance
, I went to England
last
year with a
tour
group
and I got a chance to learn about other
people
in the
group
who were from Asian countries.
Thirdly
,
tour
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a tour
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with a
counselor
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in a
group
is more convenient and economical rather than travelling alone. These
group
tours provide
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everything
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every thing
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everything
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which is essential and
also
takes
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take
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care of commuting from one place to another.
In addition
, in the presence of ,
guide
people
get to know about
language
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the language
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, cuisines and culture of
crowd
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the crowd
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living there. In conclusion, Travelling with a
guide
and in a
group
is the best
way
to make that
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holiday
hoilday
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holiday
interesting, happy and knowledgeable because it is always good to have
a
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company of different
people
in a
group
and it is the
way
to have a safe trip.
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