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Some countries import a large amount of food from other parts of the world. To what extend is this a positive or negative trend? Every country develops its products through importing and exporting and this will have a good effect on its economy, especially import is important for every country. In this essay, it will be considered about import is agree or disagree.

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Countries
 may have different consumer
products
 because of their import sector. I agree, but it could be a serious environmental concern. In
this
 essay, I will examine the pros and cons of these On the
hand
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, people benefited from the increase in foreign
products
. It helps to supply the population with basic
products
 that they do not know how to grow in their own country.
Moreover
, residents are limited to only a few
products
.
For instance
, the
middle east
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Middle East
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 region
haven't
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hasn't
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 agricultural land for growing vegetables and fruits.
Therefore
, the dependence on imports from
countries
 like India and Bangladesh will increase more .
As a result
, the population will have affordable
products
.
This
, in turn, increases life expectancy.
On the other hand
, there are downsides. First of all, it can seriously affect the environment. Another reason is that if the quality of the
products
 of the exporting country does not satisfy people, it will affect the chain of another country.
For example
, India is a major exporter of food
products
 to
middle eastern
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Middle Eastern
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countries
.
However
, when India reduces its production, it will have a significant impact on import-dependent
countries
. To summarise, increasing dependence of
countries
 on imported
products
 can bring great benefits to the population, but at the same
time
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 it can affect local production and economy.
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