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Genetic engineering for both medical and agricultural purposes is causing increasing amount of controversy. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of genetic engineering and explain your opinion.

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In the modern world, an increasing number of genetic manipulations became available for both medical and agricultural spheres. Heated debates have been continuing
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 or not the new skill is a great achievement of human beings or a dangerous measure to invade the area only God is allowed to tread. In
this
 essay, I will discuss both merits and drawbacks of the device and state my opinion, which is to protect the supporters of genetic engineering. The
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fist
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 prominent merit of
manipulation
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the manipulation
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 of
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the gene
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gene
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 is its possibility to cure diseases which used to be thought uncurable.
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, by analysing the structure of DNA and
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 of it, scientists found an
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 skill for the remedy of several serious inborn sicknesses.
Furthermore
, in the area of agriculture,
likewise
, scientists with farmers developed strong crops resistant to natural disasters
such
 as pests,
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, and droughts. The newly developed
gene shifted
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 products provided huge business chances to the stakeholders.
On the contrary
, there are undoubtedly several serious problems
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exsist
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 in genetic engineering. The
first
 risk is its
control
 or rather lack of it. If central
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governments
government
goverments
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governments
 or global institutions cannot
control
 scientists to change genes, unlawfully
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gene altered
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 products will quickly expand to the world and there will be no way back.
This
 will
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become
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become
 a huge danger to
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human beings
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human beings
 as a whole.
For instance
, if a
gene altered
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 vegetation
expand
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 without
control
, it would endanger the earth's
eco-system
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 and natural livestock or crops may be extinguished. We definitely need to avoid
this
 situation. In conclusion, as seen above, there are several serious drawbacks
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 genetic operations.
However
, due to the expanding merits and possibilities, I strongly believe that society and government should find a way to safely
control
this
 promising device and enjoy
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achievements
achievement
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 of human intelligence for both medical and agricultural purposes.
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