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Some people like to try new new things, for example, places to visit and types of food. Other people prefer to keep doing things they are familiar with. Discuss both these attitudes and give your opinion

#people #places #visit #food #attitudes
Should I try? or Should I not?
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 question mostly arises
everyday
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 in
one
's life. Some
people
fond
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 of giving shots to new and exciting
things
,
however
, some are so reserved
into
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 their own era.
This
 essay will
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discuss
dicuss
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discuss
 both kinds of personalities in detail and will provide evidence why
one
have
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 to try new
things
. To initiate with,
people
 who try new
things
 out of their box are really smart and intellectual.
For example
person
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a person
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 who
love
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 to visit
on
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apply
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different places,
learn
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and learn
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 a distinct culture of
multiplaces
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multiplexes
multi places
. some of them learn
number
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 of languages, they have
better
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 understanding of the folks who belong to that place.
People
 who
tries
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 new
things
 have better communication skills and sharp minds.
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Moreover
Morever
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Moreover
, they learn to adapt
different
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to different
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 cultures and become
better
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a better
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 human
being
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beings
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.
However
,
people
 who are comfortable doing their own
things
 are quite reserved
personality
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personalities
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. They are
perfectionist
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perfectionists
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 in their own thing. They see life
with
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from
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different
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a different
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perspective
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perspectives
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. Doing
same
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 thing day by day affects the mental
stability's
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stabilitys
stability
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 of
person
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a person
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.
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, according to
one
 article published in times news about
the
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 coder, who is been coding
from
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for
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ages
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age
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 ended up being mentally unstable. To give your mind a break it
important
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is important
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 to take off and try new
things
 In conclusion, trying new
things
 can give you make you more
smater
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smarter
 and intelligent.
However
, sticking to only
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familiar
similar
fimilar
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familiar
things
 can put you in danger. Rather than doing
one
 thing
everyday
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its
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it's
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 essential to break the chain and try new
things
 in life. Because we live just once.
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