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Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The graph below demonstrates the changes in how many
people
traveled
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travelled
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 to a certain Caribbean
island
from
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between
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 2010 and 2017. It can be clearly seen that there was a dramatic increase in the
number
 of
people
 going to the Caribbean
island
, from 1
million
 to 3.5
million
. In 2017, 2
million
 tourists stayed on
cruise
ships
, which was seven times higher than that in 2010. At the same time, the
amount
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number
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 of
people
preferred
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who preferred
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 staying on
island
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the island
an island
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 almost doubled. In 2010, only
approximate
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approximately
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 0.5 and 0.75
million
people
 chose to stay on
cruise
ships
 and
the
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on the
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island
 respectively. In the following year, there was a slight increase in the
number
 of
travelers
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travellers
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 staying on the
island
. But the
number
 of
people
spent
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who spent
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 their time on
island
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the island
an island
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 almost remained the same, The
number
 of
people
 who chose to stay on
cruise
ships
 decreased slightly in 2011 but started to rocket up in the
next
 years. More citizens stayed on the
island
from
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since
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 2011,
nonetheless
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 the
number
 of tourists
chose
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who chose
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 the
island
 remained still between 2013 and 2015. The year marks the point when the
number
 of residents staying on the
island
 overtook that of
cruise
ships
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Trend
  • Pattern
  • Fluctuation
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Comparison
  • Relationship
  • Correlation
  • Significant
  • Implication
  • Prediction
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