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Directors of large companies often receive much bigger salary increases than ordinary workers. Employer’s organization say that in a global market this is necessary to attract the best management talent. What are your views? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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