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Some people argue job satisfaction is more important than job security. Others believe a permanent job is more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some people want to find jobs where
satisfaction
 is more crucial than
security
 while other people think that a permanent
job
 has greater significance. Personally, I believe
job
satisfaction
 plays a more critical role than
job
security
. Some workers believe that a
security
job
 is more important because of the stability in terms of finance. With
permanent
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a permanent
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job
, they know exactly their monthly income, and they can control
of
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their financial plan.
Additionally
, staying with the
job
 long-term leads to greater credibility, as many employers value
job
 loyalty. Getting the trust of employers will open up many opportunities for promotion and more benefits
such
 as bonuses.
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Although
A thought
Athought
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Although
 a
security
job
 brings a lot of
benefit
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, it is not as important as a
satisfaction
job
 When satisfied, employees will be less stressed or exhausted at work. That helps boost
workers
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workers'
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 spirit and increase business productivity. For employers, keeping their employees satisfied is an effective way to reduce
turnover
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rate
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. People who are satisfied with their jobs are less likely to find other new jobs
and
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make
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 it easier for companies to recruit and retain talent. In summary, while some believe that
job
security
 plays a more important role in financial stability and
job
 credibility, I think the importance of
job
satisfaction
 is greater than
job
security
, as satisfied employees are more likely to be productive and committed to the organization
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