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You are looking for a part-time job at a football club. Write a letter to the manager of the footbal club. Introduce Explain experience andand special skills when do you think you can start

#job #football #club #manager #andand #skills
Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing
this
 letter to you to request a part-time job
opportunety
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opportunity
 in your club. I am a student
who
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apply
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studying
in
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at
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 the University of Toronto. My program is sports management systems. I like
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to play
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play
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playing
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 football in my rest time with my friends. I often watch the match that your football team plays on TV. I like your group, especially the leader, Mike. I learned lots of skills about
manage
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managing
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 sports systems,
such
 as how to build a good relationship in a group, how to make a plan to reduce injury
sporters
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sporters'
sporter's
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body
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bodies
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 and how to refresh the sporters in
short
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a short
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 time. Two months ago, I was invited to Sams club to help their basketball players refresh.
Therefore
, I think I have some experience
to do
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doing
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 the job. I will finish my grade 2 study
in
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apply
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this
 term, so during these
days
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,days
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 I am preparing
my
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for my
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 exam. I think if you could give me an
opportunety
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opportunity
 to try, I can start
in
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apply
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this
 summer vacation. Thank you for
you
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your
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patient
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patience
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 to read my letter, and I hope I can receive your reply.
Sincerly
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Sincerely
, Kevin
Submitted by kevin. B on

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The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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