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These days, more and more people are going to other countries for significant period of time,either to find a job or to study. There are clearly many benefits to doing thos, but people who live abroad can also face some difficulties. Discuss tha advantages and disadvantages of living and working in foreign country.

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Nowadays, staying or working in
foreign
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country
 is becoming significant. Some
people
 claim that they foresee
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opportunity
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 to improve important soft skills. Others believe
language
 and
culture
barrier
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barriers
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 might
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cause
casue
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cause
 negative effects. In
this
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.
To begin
, I believe international studying or working encourages
people
's soft
skill
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skills
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.
First
 of all,
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learning
learnign
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learning
 aboard develops children's survival
skill
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skills
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.
This
 means that they would face unexpected incidences due to being unfamiliar with
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 and
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people
purple
poeple
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people
.
For example
, when kids meet
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foreign
foriegn
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foreign
people
, they mostly have
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obstacle
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obstacles
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 in communication and prefer not to get into the
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foreigners
foriegners
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foreigners
.
However
, unpredictable situations pressure them to ask for help,
then
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stepping
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 out of
comfort
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 zone happened.
Second
, responsibility is
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required
requried
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required
.
This
 is because
people
 who live by themselves do
own
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their own
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schedule
scehdule
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schedules
 and follow their plans.
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,
contracting
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 officer for
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which
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has to be done within
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is
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forced those
people
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within time.
However
, some believe
language
 and
culture
 barriers tend to be problems.
Firstly
, learning
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language
 spend
lot
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 of time to be
fluently
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. In
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,
owner
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 of
language
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the language
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 does not understand what
foreigner
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the foreigner
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 is trying to convey.
For instance
, some words have
quite
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 similar
sound
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sounds
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 which might lead to misunderstanding due to not being
fluently
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;
however
, body
language
 is
useful
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 method to correct meaning.
Secondly
,
lack
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a lack
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 of knowledge
in
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of
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 living
country
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culture
 can make
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life
life's
lifes
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lives
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 harder.
Consequently
,
people
 might be excluded or look
as
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like
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 black sheep.
For example
, not following living
country
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country's
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culture
, they feel not belong to the
country
. All in all, the more we learn from experiences, the better life skills are
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developed
develpoed
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develop
. If we decide to
going
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 aboard, it will be some advantages to our
life
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 in
such
 a way.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural Exposure
  • Career Opportunities
  • Personal Growth
  • Educational Opportunities
  • Cultural and Language Barriers
  • Homesickness
  • Financial Pressure
  • Legal and Bureaucratic Challenges
  • Immersion
  • Broader Perspective
  • Job Prospects
  • Standard of Living
  • Independence
  • Problem-solving Skills
  • World-class Educational Institutions
  • Isolation
  • Misunderstanding
  • Emotional Distress
  • Loneliness
  • Financial Strain
  • Visas
  • Work Permits
  • Legal Requirements
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