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Some employers offer their employees subsidized memberships of gyms and sport clubs, believing that this will make their staff healthier and more effective at work, other employers see no benefit in doing so. Discuss both views and present your opinion.

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Nowadays there are a lot of
people
 who need some kind of physical activity in their life, not just because of health reasons, but for their own desire. Frankly, some employers provide the opportunity to go to gyms and sports clubs free of charge. There are advantages and disadvantages and I am going to present both of them. On one hand, giving staff free memberships might give you a couple of benefits.
Firstly
, if employees go to the gym they come back feeling more productive than before, which can lead your company to better results.
This
 is due to the fact that when
people
 do
the
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physical activity they release all their stress and negative feelings through physical motions. Another benefit is that it will make the employees healthier and
as a result
, the company will not have to pay as much for their medical bills and they will come to the job more frequently.
On the other hand
, there are some disadvantages,
such
 as for a company
this
 would cost a lot of money and
this
 kind of investment might not be as profitable as employers might think. Yes, it would make
people
 more productive, but the price would be way too big for that. Another problem is that a lot of
people
 would prefer just basic pay perks because for some
people
 the sports club membership has no value and they would spend that money more usefully. To sum it all up, it really depends on the employees, if their productivity would increase significantly,
then
 the idea of offering subsidized memberships of gyms and
sport
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 clubs would be cost-effective,
otherwise
, if
people
 would not
be
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more productive
then
 companies should think about spending money elsewhere.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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