Some employers offer their employees subsidized memberships of gyms and sport clubs, believing that this will make their staff healthier and more effective at work, other employers see no benefit in doing so. Discuss both views and present your opinion.

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Nowadays there are a lot of

people

who need some kind of physical activity in their life, not just because of health reasons, but for their own desire. Frankly, some employers provide the opportunity to go to gyms and sports clubs free of charge. There are advantages and disadvantages and I am going to present both of them. On one hand, giving staff free memberships might give you a couple of benefits.

Firstly

, if employees go to the gym they come back feeling more productive than before, which can lead your company to better results.

This

is due to the fact that when

people

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physical activity they release all their stress and negative feelings through physical motions. Another benefit is that it will make the employees healthier and

as a result

, the company will not have to pay as much for their medical bills and they will come to the job more frequently.

On the other hand

, there are some disadvantages,

such

as for a company

this

would cost a lot of money and

this

kind of investment might not be as profitable as employers might think. Yes, it would make

people

more productive, but the price would be way too big for that. Another problem is that a lot of

people

would prefer just basic pay perks because for some

people

the sports club membership has no value and they would spend that money more usefully. To sum it all up, it really depends on the employees, if their productivity would increase significantly,

then

the idea of offering subsidized memberships of gyms and

sport

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clubs would be cost-effective,

otherwise

, if

people

would not

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more productive

then

companies should think about spending money elsewhere.

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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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7Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Grammar mistakes
 

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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