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Employers should focus on personal qualifications over qualifand experience when choosing someone for a job. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

Employers should pay more attention to qualified
experience
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 rather than qualifications. Both skills have their advantages and disadvantages, but the agent's skill is valued more because he knows about the pitfalls in his
field
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 of
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. I do not agree with
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, because an experienced employee knows how to apply
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 in
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, and
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 an experienced attendant has more practice, unlike someone who has qualifications. On the one hand, it is more difficult for experienced employees to adapt to the new system, since every day the world develops and new discoveries occur in some
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, wholesale employees are used to working with their old expertise and skills, and it is not easy for them to master new things, and
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 takes a lot of time.
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, being experienced does not mean that an employee has great knowledge in the
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 of struggle, qualified employees are most suitable in
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 situations
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 since a qualified employee can do the
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 faster than an experienced one.
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, if we are talking about scientists or experimental physicists, chemists or people who are engaged in art,
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experience
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 plays a major role here. Because the more
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, the more practice there has been in a particular area, and the more practice, the more a person knows about
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 area, about all its subtleties.
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, artists or potters with more
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 can create more amazing works. The same applies to those who
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 in the
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 of exact sciences or medicine
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 because experienced workers have encountered more unusual situations and know what to do and how to behave in
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 situations. In conclusion, it all depends on the
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 of
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, since for a teacher it depends more on knowledge, while for medicine it is more on
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. But ,still
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 plays a bigger role, and employers are
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 based on
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experience
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