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Employers should focus on personal qualifications over qualifand experience when choosing someone for a job. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

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Employers should pay more attention to qualified
experience
 rather than qualifications. Both skills have their advantages and disadvantages, but the agent's skill is valued more because he knows about the pitfalls in his
field
 of
work
. I do not agree with
this
, because an experienced employee knows how to apply
ability
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 in
job
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, and
also
 an experienced attendant has more practice, unlike someone who has qualifications. On the one hand, it is more difficult for experienced employees to adapt to the new system, since every day the world develops and new discoveries occur in some
area
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, wholesale employees are used to working with their old expertise and skills, and it is not easy for them to master new things, and
also
 takes a lot of time.
Also
, being experienced does not mean that an employee has great knowledge in the
field
 of struggle, qualified employees are most suitable in
such
 situations
,
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 since a qualified employee can do the
work
 faster than an experienced one.
On the other hand
, if we are talking about scientists or experimental physicists, chemists or people who are engaged in art,
then
experience
 plays a major role here. Because the more
experience
, the more practice there has been in a particular area, and the more practice, the more a person knows about
this
 area, about all its subtleties.
For example
, artists or potters with more
experience
 can create more amazing works. The same applies to those who
work
 in the
field
 of exact sciences or medicine
,
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 because experienced workers have encountered more unusual situations and know what to do and how to behave in
such
 situations. In conclusion, it all depends on the
field
 of
work
, since for a teacher it depends more on knowledge, while for medicine it is more on
experience
. But ,still
experience
 plays a bigger role, and employers are
also
 based on
work
experience
.
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