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Nowadays, people spend more and more time away from their families. Why is this? What effect will it have on themselves and their families?

#people #time #families #effect
With the development of the fast society, more and more
people
 prefer to go outside for
long
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time
.In recent years, young
people
 cost much
time
to
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busy
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 but except accompany their parents.The reason is that
people
 need to deal with lots of social
things
 and
facing
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 more complex events
at
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outdoors in modern urban. Meanwhile, it caused children and family members
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increasing
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 negative influences which is reduce close
relationships
. At
first
,
as a result
of
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citizens have to deal with amounts of
things
.Male
people
 need to
facing
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 more social
things
except
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 work events.That’s because
people
 have sorts of pressures and need to keep going lives.
Such
 as these
people
 have to
raising
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 their
home
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homes
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, so they go out to
the
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other places to do
the
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part-time
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part
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part-time
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time
 jobs for earning more money.
In addition
, female
people
also
 have their stresses towards
humans
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relationships
.They get along with
children
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their children
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 and
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their husband
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husband
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husbands
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 for a long
time
. So
woman
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women
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 even should
crate
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create
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 more social chances to communicate with other
people
.
Then
 they can
expend
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expand
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 their circle of friends and have
variety
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various
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social
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of social
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 activities.Whatever wife or mother
which
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is
person’s
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a person’s
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 identity,
female
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females
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also
 should
needs
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 abundant lifestyles.
For example
,
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the woman
a woman
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woman
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women
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 did housework and raised
baby
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babies
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 every day and night in the past.
However
,in
the
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modern society,
female
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the female
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 has sorts of
entitle
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 to do a lot of
things
at
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outdoors.
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These
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is
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 basically
same
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 as which was
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the male
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male
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males
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 did. On the one hand,
this
 phenomenon lead to children and family
people
 both
were
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being
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 hazarded.Because human beings need more physical touches
for
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to
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enhance
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enhancing
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 interpersonal
relationships
.Especially for
people
 related by blood.If someone
are
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is
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 not keep in touch with their family members for a long
time
.These
people
 will be reduced more and more emotions plus possibly increase plenty of aggressive
behaviors
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.
Due to initial
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 emotion of
baby
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a baby
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 is affection between blood relations.So a person should redesign their schedule and take
time
 with their parents.
On the other hand
,
people
 be away from home for a long
time
 to busy.It
is
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easily
cause
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causes
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 body condition
get
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 worse.Lots of younger citizens start to go to the hospital
for
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treat
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treating
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 modern diseases
such
 as stomach diseases caused by
much
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alcohol drinking and insomnia caused by excessive tension during the daytime. In brief,
people
 don’t get along with their families for a long
time
 because they have various social pressures nowadays,which
also
 lead to amounts of negative
relationships
 with their family members and person’s health hazards.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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