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Band 2.5

Traffic congestion is becoming a huge problem for many major cities. Suggest some measures that could be taken to reduce traffic in big cities.

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Nowadays, cities are suffering from excessive traffic that made people
be
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unpleasant to live and work in. Due to the overpopulation and each member
has
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 his own
car
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 issue occurs. I am with
to have
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 your own
car
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 but we must support and improve public transportation during working hours at least and
less
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 diseases. Actually, if
their
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 is good public transportation or buses for every company which we miss in our cities, people will get encouraged to keep their cars at home and go to work and
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 the whole system would
improved
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be improved
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. As well, if cars are
less
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 means
less
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 kids and adults suffers from asthma and wear
breathing
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 mask to protect themselves.
In
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the other hand, having your own
car
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make
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makes
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 shopping,
doctors
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 appointments and grocery shopping
more
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easier to carry into the boot of the
car
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.
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,
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business
bussiness
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business
 would suffer terribly cause costumers
they
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will not visit only if they have
an
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easy transport to come. To conclude, cities were more beautiful before because we used to see the art in every building and street. I support the idea to have your own
car
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 but get to your work with public transportation or private buses for the company
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 will be helpful in different ways
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