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Traffic congestion is a serious problem in most big cities. Some people believe that governments should build more roads. What do you think about the solution?

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It is suggested to government should
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broaden
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broaden
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road
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directly
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 way to solve
this
 problem,in my view the disadvantages may overweight the benefits.In
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 I will discuss why I think
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 the
roads
 may not a good solution.
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environmental
enviornmental
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environmental
 perspective,the more people doing construction,the more reducing of habitation of wild animals.In my own experience, when I drive on the
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, it
not
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 rare to see
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 bodies lying on the
road
.Obviously, if people build more and more
road
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, it means the
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wild life
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 should
across
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 these
roads
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 their life. One of
a
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case in Taiwan, there are "Shihu" which are nearly extinct wild cats
inhabitate
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inhabitants
 in central Taiwan, since the
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government
governemt
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government
 build more
roads
 in
few
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 years age enhanced "
road
 kill" of Shihu, data collected from conservation
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 the number of Shihu in Taiwan drop dramatically recently.
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 more
roads
 may only waste money if the plan
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uncomplete
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 . Here is an example in
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 area of Taipei City,
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government
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goverment
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government
 built a lot of
roads
 there for easing traffic jam
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hours
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, but due to the interchanges
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 of
highway
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 didn't
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broaden
broken
 at the same time,
as a
result
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 many vehicles still stuck in narrow interchanges even there are many
roads
 already built there. To conclude, if a government takes the method to improve the problems of traffic congestion, I suggested it is important to preview these plans by professional people in various
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therefore
 it may only
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buring
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bring
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buget
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 even brings very little benefit at all.
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