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the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The charts illustrate the amount of police budget in a specific area, Britain, between 2017 and 2018. The table presents
sources
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 of money and how the funding was allocated.
Overall
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, three
sources
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 of the incoming budget for police, which from the national government, the biggest funder, local taxes, and other
sources
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. The highest expense was the salary spent on salaries; the smallest part was allocated to technology.
To begin
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 with, the total budget in 2 years increased significantly from 304.7
million
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 to 318.6
million
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,
while
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 the primary source of money was from the national government sector, which accounted for between 175.5
million
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 and 177.8
million
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. Another source was from local taxes, which grew from 91.2
million
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 to 102.3
million
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,
whereas
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 the most minor source from other
sources
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 rose slightly from 38
million
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 to 38.5
million
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. The highest expense was arranged for salary, which increased from 75% to 69%, where the building and transport remained the same at 17%. Technology was the lowest number of money,
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rising to 14% in 2018 compared previous
year
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 9%.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sources, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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