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Some people think that it is the responsibility of the government of the country to ensure a healthy lifestyle for its people, while others believe that individuals should be free to make decisions for their lifestyles.

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Nowadays, the topic of healthy life is being brought up daily. Many
people
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 ask themselves: who is responsible for all of
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? Are we responsible? Is the
government
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 responsible for our
health
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? It is obvious to say that different
people
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 have discrete opinions. Despite those beliefs, after looking at the factors, I think every individual is responsible for their
health
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. To start with, each individual knows their body better than the
government
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 knows it.
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 means, the individual can decide when they feel it's best to go to the doctor, when it's best to work out or when it's best to stop doing sports, and so on.
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 exemplifies that the person has full responsibility for their healthy
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 and matter of fact, any
lifestyle
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 they want to follow. As mentioned before,
people
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also
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 tend to think that the
government
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 has a say in a person's
lifestyle
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. As mentioned above,
people
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 are
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 inclined to believe that the
government
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 is
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 responsible for a person’s
health
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 and healthy
lifestyle
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. Overall,
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 not completely inaccurate but the individual has more responsibility. The reason the
government
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 is
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 responsible for the healthy
lifestyle
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 of human beings is that they are the ones who provide the hospitals, the ambulances, the
health
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 insurance, and all of that. All in all, after looking at all the factors, every individual is responsible for their healthy
lifestyle
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 but the
government
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 themselves, are responsible for providing an efficient and well-working
health
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 service.
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