It is pointless making children who lack artistic talent learn painting and drawing in Art classes at school. Instead, they should concentrate on other creative or practical subjects for which they may have more aptitude. To what extent do you agree ot disagree?

The education
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is key to success. In
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school
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we are taught all the basic subjects and as we grow from
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elementary
to
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middle
midddle
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middle
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to High school, we have
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to choose a subject for which we have more
apitutde
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. Every subject, including painting and drawing, are
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important
importants
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for young students but
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too many subjects may lead to too much pressure and load.
Paiting
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Painting
and drawing in childhood make our mind
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sharp and we learn to distinguish the
colors
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from each other. Basic knowledge of drawing and paintings help us in our daily life when we grow older. Having too many
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in school is very stressful for students so it's better to concentrate more on each student's
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