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Fossil fuels (coal, oil, natural gas) are the main source in many countries, but in some countries the use of alternative source of energy (wind and solar energy) are encouraged. To what extent do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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The given data reflects the transformation of the same place by two images in Moscow from
1980-s
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the 1980-s
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 and nowadays. Looking from the overall perspective,
this
 Moscow spot has considerably changed in turns of infrastructural
buildings
 and types of
cars
 on the road.
However
, it is seen that some backside
buildings
 stayed untouched.
First
 of all, nowadays, there are significantly more
cars
 on the road than in 1980.
Moreover
, only one car has been driving to the right 80-s, whereas the recent picture shows five
cars
 moving right. The
cars
 themselves have a big range of variety nowadays compared to the
cars
 in 1980.
In addition
 to differences on the road, constructures, in turn,
changed
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 in numbers. In fact, in 1980 there were fewer
buildings
 than today. Front-line houses have changed their appearance: the roof colour is green nowadays but it was red in 1980. It is
also
 seen that background high
buildings
 remain the same.
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