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More and more people move from the countryside to big cities. Does this development bring more advantages or disadvantages to the environment?

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The past few decades have seen a rising tide of people migrating from countries to big cities.
While
 urban expansion may have some positive effects, the damage to the environment is much more serious. The main disadvantage of
this
 trend is the increased possibility of environmental pollution. On the one hand ,The growing number of urban residents will generate more household waste than before.
As a result
, waste treatment will need burning and spilling, which will lead to more air pollution and soil degradation.
On the other hand
, People who
moved
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 to the city and have to go to work every day make more use of private cars, which greenhouse gas emissions would intensify air pollution and.worsen the ecological condition. Spaces tend to occupy the construction of homes and office buildings, which harms the urban ecosystem. The authorities could be argued to enjoy the influx of new immigrants,
according to
 some. Environmental protection measures like the development of alternatives would receive more revenue. energy or optimizing ways of misuse disposal.
However
, It is impossible to solve a problem with a large population,because approaches harm the environment irreversibly. Even if a new waste disposal system is put in place, issues will still arise when the amount
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far exceeds the system’s capacity to handle it. when a large group of people moves from the countryside to cities, it is more likely to cause environmental problems that are irreparable.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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