Some people argue that it is more important to have an enjoyable job than to earn a lot of money. Others disagree and think that a good salary leads to a better life. Discuss both views. And give your opinion.

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The decision on which
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career
carrier
carreer
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career
path to follow is somehow vital in a person's life. Many
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consider
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job
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offering high salary will guarantee a more fulfilling life. Others believe that joy and working satisfaction is the key factors
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choosing an occupation. There
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a range of benefits flowing from working for decent financial rewards. One of them is that workers are able to give their children a higher-quality educational environment, especially international schools. Simultaneously, they will afford branded items, jewellery and even multi-story houses, all of which show their level of material success and help individuals to command respect from communities.
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, high earners
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are capable of paying for travel tours to domestic hotspots or even foreign ones in order to widen their horizons.
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, it is arguably stressful to get a well-paid
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. In order to receive
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high wages, employees are expected to bury their
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in their projects and work against pressure as well as deadlines every midnight. By doing that, they are destroying their health day by day in exchange for financial rewards.
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, it is advisable to work for/follow a
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from which people can receive satisfaction. With a positive and
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mind, people can accomplish their tasks more effectively as well as productively. These workers can have a more balanced life in which they acquire both health and pleasure at work. As far as I am concerned, it may be impossible to find
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enjoyable
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that offers
high
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a high
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salary.
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