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Some people think that men and women have different qualities. Therefore, some certain jobs are suitable for men and some jobs are suitable for women. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #men #women #qualities #jobs
On the one hand,
male
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 and
female
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 have different body
condition
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conditions
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 and
characteristic
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characteristics
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 for events.The male
have
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strong
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a strong
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 physical
body
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.So the boss
prefer
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 to choose male in order to hold a lot of consuming labour
works
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.The reason is that
male
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males
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 can do more things than
female
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females
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 did in per day.If
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a woman
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woman
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women
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 did
these
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 type of work
such
 as
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a
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factory
worker
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and
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 construction
worker
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workers
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.They may not maintain stable
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conditions
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 in
long
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terms
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.Both of these jobs need to cost plenty of
energies
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 and time.Whereas,
the
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 woman
also
 have their own expertise areas.As
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a female
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female
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females
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,there would prefer to deal with elaborate and aesthetic work
contents
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.Because
this
 gender has amounts of
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the patient
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patient
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 to handle several complex jobs.Plus,people would
more
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trust
female
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females
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 in
this
 aspect.
For instance
,according to
the
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society
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 research,women enjoy
to be
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 a designer or
nurse
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.
These situation
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 already become
to
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the
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 common phenomenon.
However
,if one gender
come
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 into the other gender’s job.Maybe it
cause
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 more unexpected harvest.Because in
same
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 place,
diversity
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 people have different unique features
then
 add extra advantages for things to get better.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender roles
  • inherent qualities
  • social dynamics
  • merit-based selection
  • advancements in technology
  • levelled the playing field
  • gender stereotypes
  • equal opportunities
  • physical differences
  • workplace
  • evolving
  • traditional view
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