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The participants were comprised of 104
children
 (51 in the control and 53 in the game groups) who were candidates for elective surgery at the Pediatric Hospital of
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 Mohammad Kermanshahi. The sample
size
 was determined at a confidence level of 95% and test power of 80%, and for effect
size
 (ES), a sample
size
 of 51 for each group was deemed adequate. The standard deviation (SD) of the
children
's anxiety in intervention and control groups
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 estimated to be 14.1 and 12.[16] Considering the possibility of 20% attrition, when the sample
size
 reached 104, the research team decided to stop samplings.
Children
 were assigned into two experimental and control groups by simple randomization, using the table of random numbers by
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 of
children
 available in the clinic. The participants were
children
 who were referred to the hospital for elective surgical procedures
such
 as herniotomy, undescended testes, hydrocele, hypospadias, tonsillectomy, and extra masses. The patients were selected as classified in class I or II, according to the American Society of Anesthesiologists (ASA). ASA l refers to a normal healthy patient and ASA II describes a patient with
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 systemic disease without substantive functional limitations (i.e., mild asthma).[20] One of the recommendations in nursing practice is focusing on
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 communication, before the surgery the child
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usually anxious and his family
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 about the situation,
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focusing to decrease anxiety based on the evidence which can positively reflect on the health care provided
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