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Houses are essential for people. Some people think that government should offer free houses for people who cannot afford to pay for it. Do you agree or disagree with this statement ?

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Everyones
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Everyone
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 need to have
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a building
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building
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 for the place to live and sleep. Some
family
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families
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 can afford to pay for it
however
 some cannot . In my opinion , I disagree that government should offer free
houses
. It is true,
building
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buildings
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 are really essential for every society. But it is up to the individual person which
have
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 the ability to purchase it.
Houses
 are like an achievement in life which be bought with money and the way to get the money is from the work. If everyone
have
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 free
houses
 from the government, So the country doesn't have productivity from the population who work for money. Nowadays the number of homeless is increasing.
Thus
, the solution maybe is government should give them a job and trade them with some shelter for a place they can call 'home'. I think it is not offered free
houses
 because they must work for the country and their salary
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houses
.
Therefore
, I have sympathy for poor people but human is a social
animal
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 which gather together will make an economic system. apartment
are
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 essential
fundamental
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 that can get with their endeavour
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