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Television has destroyed communication among friends and families. What is your opinion?

#television #communication #friends #families
Some people, including me, believe that the relationship
among
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human beings and the quality of gatherings
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 been affected negatively by broadcasts.
Thus
, in
this
 essay, the rational reasons
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 the reduction of contacts
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are programs
such
 as negative
news
 and
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advertisements
advertisment
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advertisement
 and series ,etc. will be discussed.
Firstly
, people basically take part
to
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the
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family gatherings less than
the
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 past. The main reason is the dissension within their ideas which could not be handled.
For example
, when television shows
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inconvenient
news
 without any filters, and all the individuals keep watching them
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 when they are with others whether
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extended family or some friends, everyone took their own opinion and judgment . So, after the program, the individuals are trying in order to share their opinions about the
news
. From my personal experience, in
such
 situations, trying to
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 their own ideas, the persons are not capable of listening and paying attention to
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 beliefs , so those qualifications make people uncomfortable or upset. To
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, watching the negative programs need to be eliminated while the purpose of being together is having positive feelings.
Secondly
, unstructured advertisements ,which are often shown on
medias
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media
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 in the middle of popular movies and series , are the alternative reason for the division. In fact,
this
 kind of commercial is addressed to make the audience feel the lack of some facilities.
In other words
, channels are receiving
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amount
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 of money because of showing
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television commercials, and the chief aim of
that is
 to convince the
persons
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people
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 to purchase colourful and different stuff sometimes just for a competition. Take the
loosing
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 weight pills as an example; everyone suffering from obesity, definitely
have
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 tried to take the pills once during their life and the medicine might be abandoned after
awhile
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.
Thus
, I believe keeping up competing with
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households unlimitedly,
the
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humans are adopting
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tension and offence. In conclusion, in upgraded societies, the quality of the gatherings of
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countless human beings have decreased by
medias
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media
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 like advertising programs and the negatively affected
news
. From my point of view, if the producers and administrators continue to produce
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unsuitable
medias
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media
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, the offence will be increased among
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societies.
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