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In many countries, plastic containers have become more common than ever and by used by many food and drinks companies. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantae

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Many foods and drink companies have changed from metal containers to plastic ones for several reasons. ,
Definitely
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 it is to the advantage of the industry to opt for
this
 choice.
On the other hand
, it has been proven that
this
 material is very hazardous in several ways.
Firstly
, the most alarming reason
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the world is polluted is
this
 is not a biodegradable product. If not properly
disposed
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, it will remain in the environment causing harm to various animals and plants on land and in the sea. Researchers have
also
 discovered that some foods stocked in plastic containers can turn toxic if stocked for a
such
 long period. Various food poisoning cases have been recorded in the past. Many industries are using plastic containers for various reasons. Comparing the price to other products, it is cheaper and easily manufactured. ,
Secondly
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this
 particular material is lighter than any other material and
thus
 gains in weight when exporting foods and drinks to other countries. To conclude, economically it is beneficial for many companies but ecologically it has an irreversible effect.
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