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Big salary is much more important than job satisfaction. Do you agree or disagree?

#salary #job #satisfaction
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It is often argued that
people
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 who have a
job
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 with high
salary
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 than
the
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others
who
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prefer
job
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 satisfaction. I totally disagree with
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 opinion and believe individuals who like being satisfied with their jobs can be motivated and happier than others.
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, there is no denying the fact that
job
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 satisfaction provides
people
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 with a sense of
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 in their life. It is clear that our career plays a significant role in our happy life while much more money cannot guarantee it.
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, a lot of famous researchers select their
job
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 because not only do they
aspire
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 earn more money but they are
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 passionate about science.
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 why it is more important to opt
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job
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 that makes you happy than to have only a high
salary
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 work.
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, doing what you enjoy keeps you motivated and normally leads to career growth.
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, there is a strong relationship between success and
job
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 motivation.
People
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 who are involved in their pleasurable have a high chance to be successful and create value.
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, there are a lot of popular authors who abandoned their unpleased jobs and became more famous nowadays.
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,
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 of jobs that keep you satisfied outweigh the drawbacks of a low
salary
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 in
a
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long term
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 period. To conclude, I strongly believe that
job
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 satisfaction is more beneficial than having the advantage of a high
salary
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 because
it
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the more satisfied
people
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 are the happier and more motivated they will be.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • remuneration
  • financial security
  • motivation
  • luxuries
  • material possessions
  • fulfillment
  • work-life balance
  • stress levels
  • mental well-being
  • job security
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