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Big salary is much more important than job satisfaction. Do you agree or disagree?

#salary #job #satisfaction
It is often argued that
people
 who have a
job
 with high
salary
 than
the
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others
who
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prefer
job
 satisfaction. I totally disagree with
this
 opinion and believe individuals who like being satisfied with their jobs can be motivated and happier than others.
Firstly
, there is no denying the fact that
job
 satisfaction provides
people
 with a sense of
fulfillment
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 in their life. It is clear that our career plays a significant role in our happy life while much more money cannot guarantee it.
For example
, a lot of famous researchers select their
job
 because not only do they
aspire
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 earn more money but they are
also
 passionate about science.
That is
 why it is more important to opt
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job
 that makes you happy than to have only a high
salary
 work.
Secondly
, doing what you enjoy keeps you motivated and normally leads to career growth.
In other words
, there is a strong relationship between success and
job
 motivation.
People
 who are involved in their pleasurable have a high chance to be successful and create value.
For instance
, there are a lot of popular authors who abandoned their unpleased jobs and became more famous nowadays.
Thus
,
advantages
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 of jobs that keep you satisfied outweigh the drawbacks of a low
salary
 in
a
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long term
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 period. To conclude, I strongly believe that
job
 satisfaction is more beneficial than having the advantage of a high
salary
 because
it
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the more satisfied
people
 are the happier and more motivated they will be.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • remuneration
  • financial security
  • motivation
  • luxuries
  • material possessions
  • fulfillment
  • work-life balance
  • stress levels
  • mental well-being
  • job security
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