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One problem faced by almost every large city is traffic congestion. What do you think the causes are? What solutions can you suggest? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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 of the biggest issues faced by the majority of metropolises is traffic jams. The main reason for
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 is that there are always the same peak
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 when people start and finish work, and
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 agreeable solution for
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. There is a big number of individuals in a concrete jungle, some of them living there and others migrating, a large percentage of them work every day from 9 AM to 5 PM, leaving at the same time. Everyone is rushing home after a long, hard day to meet with
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family and friends, but because of the fact that everyone has the same office
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, traffic
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 are created.
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, my father always tries to leave a little early to avoid
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, and it always works perfectly. A solution that could easily help is changing the actual working time to a more pliable
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, 40% of the workers finish their day at 4 PM and the other 60% finish at 6 PM. The idea here is the separation of pressure, which could help avoid most of the difficulties. Many surveys show results which seem unbelievable, like the
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 made in the capital of Moldova, where only
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 hour could make so much difference. In conclusion, the major problem of traffic congestion caused by the rushing
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 before and after work
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 can be partly alleviated by alternating the working
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. I would certainly love
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic congestion
  • urban population
  • public transportation
  • urban planning
  • infrastructure
  • economic strength
  • consumerism
  • car ownership
  • commuting
  • peak hours
  • public transit
  • carpooling
  • ride-sharing
  • remote work
  • flexible working hours
  • cycling infrastructure
  • congestion charges
  • traffic management systems
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