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Some people believe that women are better leaders than men. To which extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people claim that
women
 in leadership roles are more successful than
men
. I can not entirely agree with
this
 because gender is not the main factor in evaluating a good chief, and it seems both sides have the same ability. On the one hand, research shows that
women
 outperform
men
 in competencies, especially caring for others' skills and building relationships. These are the main trait of a good commander.
For example
, Finland's female government leaders won praise for handling the early coronavirus pandemic.
In addition
, they put care in most of their decisions, which gives the greater right to trans people, closing the gender pay gap or encouraging parents to share their responsibility.
Besides
 the power in politics,
women
also
 prove their proficiency in business.
For instance
, Ginna Rinehart, who owns and builds the biggest iron ore company in the world, is the wealthiest person in Australia.
On the other hand
, scientific studies
also
 show that
men
 outscore
women
 in decision-making competency, which is the critical feature of a good leader, and help a company to gain more benefit. A clear example is that over 95% of Fortune 500 global companies' CEOs were
men
 in 2012.
Moreover
,
men
 have more advantages than
women
 because of the difference in physical body structure. To illustrate, most
women
 take a break for a long time after pregnancy, reducing their promotion opportunities, which
men
 never need to deal with
this
 challenge. In conclusion, there are no significant differences among gender in terms of leadership effectiveness. It means
men
 and
women
 are equally suitable for leadership roles.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • emotional intelligence
  • democratic leadership
  • participation
  • collaboration
  • diverse leadership
  • decision-making
  • problem-solving
  • perspectives
  • compassionate
  • empathetic
  • supportive work environment
  • historical data
  • research
  • female-led businesses
  • financial performance
  • multitasking
  • managing complex projects
  • teams
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