Some people say History is one of most important school subjects other people think that, in today world,subject like science and technology are more important than History.

Schools are the main place
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learning about life. There are different views about what to study in schools. While some people believe that studying
history
should come
first
, others think that scientific
subjects
are the most important. In my opinion, all
subjects
are significant in their own way. On one hand,
history
is considered a rich source
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experience
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. To illustrate,
history
holds stories and facts of our ancestors and how they managed their lives.
For example
, economic information can help us to analyze and solve today's financial obstacles. Not only that
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but
also
history
privileges every student with the value of belonging when he knows about his country's past.
Thus
,
history
as a subject should come
first
.
On the other hand
, others consider science and
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subjects
as class A
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. Those
subjects
will endow students to gain soft skills which are necessary for job opportunities in today's world. When a student starts to learn about programming languages
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JAVA or C++, he will be able to work quickly after graduation. Programming jobs are now one of the
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jobs that do not require much infrastructure, just a computer, and it participated by about 50 billion dollars
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the world economy in 2021. In conclusion, I believe that debate about the suitable subject will remain.
Also
, whether
history
or science, both are important in their way.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • crucial
  • comprehend
  • retrospect
  • gain insights
  • reflect on
  • sharpen
  • evaluate
  • significance
  • heritage
  • legacy
  • advent
  • breakthroughs
  • sustain
  • sustainability
  • revolutions
  • empowered
  • overcome
  • transform
  • advancements
  • collaboration
  • cooperation
  • diversity
  • fulfilling
  • promote
  • facilitate
  • prosperity
  • enhance
  • foster
  • foundation
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