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Nowadays, many families have both parents working. Some working parents believe other family members like grandparents can take care of their children, while others think childcare centers provide the best care. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#families #parents #members #grandparents #care #children #childcare #centers
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caring
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 is the most important part of
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parents
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even though
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view
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 can give good
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children
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 well the reason its blood relation their own kids .
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 business to earn good money and some situations
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children
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because
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 are away from them and they are not healthy
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grandparents
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grand
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 and no more other relatives
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 on the one hand ,cannot blame all
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day
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safe
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 some of them are still safe.Some trusted centres are running
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care
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facilities
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facilities
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type
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 of centres are not available in all areas.
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secondly
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day cares
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daycares
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 not providing good
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quality
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quality
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because
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running
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in
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business
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 mind and earning money based on the
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children
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 age group and they
are try
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 to
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accommodate
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accommodate
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 together in
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doesn't
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 each kid .
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sophisticated
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 situation and cannot
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 it. In my opinion family
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safe to take
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 the main and hidden part of
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parents
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 can work smoothly
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without
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with out
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 any stress and not need to be
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worried
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worried
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children
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 until they work finished I conclude that
,
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the government have to take
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opportunity
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oppurtunity
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opportunity
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authorized
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