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Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now 'one big traffic jam'. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars?

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There is no doubt that day's people in the
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 thirty years use car everyday everywhere. The question is, do you think
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dangerous for nature? In the essay, I am going to discuss both views and draw my own conclusion. In terms of the problem,
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 make our life easier, and our family more nearly, but it is dangerous for the Earth.
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 are the smartest thing for human life it is making
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travel, road trips and family near
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us,
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,If it is difficult to reach work or school early, which
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 increases the rate of traffic accidents, the main reason given to supports
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 claim is that
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 are dangerous for human life and the world even the planet because the smoke goes out from
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 and a lot of things
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 factories it makes the ozone poorly. To illustrate, in the
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 ten years the sun will kill the planet and people. In other ,words we could say that we need to stop using
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 and do like the UK they use the tube, and metro most than
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 and that will help to dip the percentage of the car in the world. In conclusion,
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 I think every single person need to know how is important to keep the world safe,and the Government the transport less figure of care in the future, even accident will dip,
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, I believe that in my opinion manufacturing
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 friend for the environment, do not work with gas work with Solar energy.
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